点绛唇
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<DIV align=center><STRONG><FONT size=6><FONT color=#ff6666><FONT face=楷体_GB2312>点 绛 唇</FONT></FONT></FONT></STRONG></DIV>
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<DIV align=center><STRONG><FONT color=#ff6666><FONT face=楷体_GB2312><FONT size=4>文/萧琴儿<WBR><WBR style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></FONT></FONT></FONT></STRONG></DIV>
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<CENTER><FONT style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face=楷体_GB2312 color=navy size=5><STRONG>满地白花，</STRONG></FONT><WBR style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></CENTER>
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<CENTER><FONT style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face=楷体_GB2312 color=navy size=5><STRONG>风寒梅舞笙箫闹。</STRONG></FONT><WBR style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></CENTER>
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<CENTER><FONT style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face=楷体_GB2312 color=navy size=5><STRONG>倩影新袄，</STRONG></FONT><WBR style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></CENTER>
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<CENTER><FONT style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face=楷体_GB2312 color=navy size=5><STRONG>只为年春到。</STRONG></FONT><WBR style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></CENTER><FONT style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face=楷体_GB2312 size=5>
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<CENTER><STRONG><FONT color=navy>去是年尾，</FONT></STRONG></FONT><WBR style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></CENTER>
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<CENTER><FONT style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face=楷体_GB2312 color=navy size=5><STRONG>来是春报晓。</STRONG></FONT><WBR style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></CENTER>
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<CENTER><FONT style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face=楷体_GB2312 color=navy size=5><STRONG>开口笑，</STRONG></FONT><WBR style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></CENTER>
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<CENTER><FONT style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face=楷体_GB2312 color=navy size=5><STRONG>人间拱手好，</STRONG></FONT><WBR style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></CENTER>
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<CENTER><FONT style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face=楷体_GB2312 color=navy size=5><STRONG>琴瑟依然巧。</STRONG></FONT></CENTER>
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<CENTER><FONT style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face=楷体_GB2312 color=navy size=5><STRONG>http://stream12.music.soso.com/30612433.mp3<BR></CENTER></STRONG></FONT>
[ 本帖最后由 萧琴儿 于 2010-2-14 10:51 编辑 ] <P>尘弟新年快乐！这是我看到你的第一首词作品，韵律悠扬、闹春在雪、梅花飞舞中尽显。 <BR>写的不错，压韵没有问题，有几处出律~~<BR></P>
<P>附：点绛唇 词谱对照检查一下</P>
<P><BR>⊙仄平平（句）<BR>⊙平⊙仄平平仄（韵）<BR>仄平平仄（韵）<BR>⊙仄平平仄（韵）</P>
<P>⊙仄平平（句）<BR>⊙仄平平仄（韵）<BR>平⊙仄（韵）<BR>仄平平仄（韵）<BR>⊙仄平平仄（韵）</P>
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由于忙,好久没来了,刚看到你的帖!
谢谢你指点和欣赏非常荣幸,另祝你新年快乐! 呵呵，是琴儿的佳作，俺当时看错了，还以为是萧幕尘弟弟的作品呢，敬请谅解，都怪俺眼浊 原帖由 萧琴儿 于 2010-2-18 20:31 发表 static/image/common/back.gif
由于忙,好久没来了,刚看到你的帖!
谢谢你指点和欣赏非常荣幸,另祝你新年快乐!
琴儿不用客气，祝虎年吉祥~~
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