<P class=MsoNormal style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-bidi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA\">作品中字的色彩和力量给人一种正义或邪恶的力量，</SPAN></SPAN></P>
<P class=MsoNormal style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-bidi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA\">这是一个很强的力量，</SPAN></SPAN></P>
<P class=MsoNormal style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-bidi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA\">用在这表现的很硬气，</SPAN></SPAN></P>
<P class=MsoNormal style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-bidi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA\">但是，</SPAN></SPAN></P>
<P class=MsoNormal style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-bidi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA\">用来表现母爱会产生一种疏远。</SPAN></SPAN></P>
<P class=MsoNormal style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-bidi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA\">希望能在色调处理上做的柔和一些，</SPAN></SPAN></P>
<P class=MsoNormal style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-bidi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA\">让色彩更有亲和力。</SPAN></SPAN></P>
<P class=MsoNormal style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-bidi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA\">让文字说话才是更好的作品。</SPAN></SPAN></P> 活到老 学到老 跟着姐姐学不少 <P class=MsoNormal style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-bidi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA\"><FONT size=2>在字体的处理上很用心，</FONT></SPAN></SPAN></P>
<P class=MsoNormal style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-bidi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA\"><FONT size=2>不过线条的表现有些不自然。</FONT></SPAN></SPAN></P>
<P class=MsoNormal style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-bidi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA\"><FONT size=2>整体还是有些松散，</FONT></SPAN></SPAN></P>
<P class=MsoNormal style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-bidi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA\"><FONT size=2>第二个的设计还是很不错的，</FONT></SPAN></SPAN></P>
<P class=MsoNormal style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-bidi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA\"><FONT size=2>希望能再美化一些,</FONT></SPAN></SPAN></P>
<P class=MsoNormal style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'\"><SPAN style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-bidi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA\"><FONT size=2>作品会更出色。</FONT></SPAN></SPAN></P>
回复 22# 的帖子
呵呵~这些可是专家级别的回帖呢，傲雪也在学习呢。 <P>设计很大胆，</P><P>采用强有力的黑红搭配，</P>
<P>让人感觉有点毛骨悚然，</P>
<P>有些像恐怖片的字体设计，</P>
<P>母爱更应该体现出一种温暖的色彩。</P>
<P>希望在日后的设计中先领会主题的意境后再去构图效果会更出色。</P>
<P> </P>
<P>作者在设计中很好的运用到端午元素龙以及祥云，</P>
<P>但是在字体方面没有凸显出设计，</P>
<P>似乎运用的都是现成的以及在线生成的字体，</P>
<P>在文字排版方面显得稍乱，</P>
<P>且字体颜色采用黑色，</P>
<P>没有层次感，</P>
<P>使整个设计显得呆板，</P>
<P>并且让欣赏着感受不到端午的那种氛围。</P> <P>在色彩上做的很好，</P>
<P>以玉色做主色，</P>
<P>显的格外高贵抢眼，</P>
<P>是个耐看的作品，</P>
<P>加上花絮的效果把玉的质感表现的更完美。</P>
<P>不足之处缺少字体的设计感。</P> <P>整个作品的设计含量不是很突出!</P>
<P>感觉像是将所有端午的元素拿过来一扔上去就完事,</P>
<P>缺少一种重新组合、加工的精神,</P>
<P>版面显的很凌乱,</P>
<P>而且主题\"万水千山“粽”是情\"字体设计的不够,</P>
<P>主题不够明确!</P>
<P>希望作者继续努力，</P>
<P>期待下次更好的作品。</P> <P>主题与背景中的青山绿水相当贴切，</P>
<P>意指“万水千山”，</P>
<P>看上去给人一种清爽的感觉，</P>
<P>几个艺术字处理的还是很有变化。</P>
<P><BR>不足：</P>
<P>“粽”字变化不是很大，</P>
<P>可以再做粗狂一点，</P>
<P>在整个标题里突出一下会更好。</P>
<P><BR>作品处理的简单而不失大方，</P>
<P>字体也很清秀，</P>
<P>一封家书寓意远在母亲对千里之外的儿女们的思念。</P>
<P>同样也承载着儿女们对母亲的问候。</P>
<P><BR>不足：</P>
<P>关键的“母”字也没有很好的表现出来，</P>
<P>虽然字很大，</P>
<P>但没达到效果。</P>
<P>个人建议可以把母字中间一横的左边和下面一横拉长，</P>
<P>把其它的字放到上面，</P>
<P>两个延长的笔画代表相隔千里的亲人，</P>
<P>意思就是虽然远在他乡，</P>
<P>但母亲还是很挂念自己的儿女。</P>
<P>希望作者继续努力，期待下次更好的作品。</P> <P>优点：</P>
<P>大幅面的绿色强烈的冲击着我们的视觉，</P>
<P>最醒目的无非是这个“粽”字，</P>
<P>处理非常到位，</P>
<P>而绕盘子而做的艺术字很有创意，</P>
<P>有画龙点睛之效果，</P>
<P>清新而自然，</P>
<P>庄重而大方。<BR>不足：</P>
<P>没有明显的不足，</P>
<P>个人觉得右上角“香飘十里”几个字不是很明显，</P>
<P>可以再稍稍处理一下。</P>
<P> </P> <P> </P>
<P>用寥寥几笔就表达了万水千山的画面，</P>
<P>字体排列错落有致，</P>
<P>一棵水墨风格的竹子与本次的主题也结合的相当不错。<BR>不足：</P>
<P>几个字没有很好的串联在一起，</P>
<P>虽然排列不错，</P>
<P>但没有整体感。</P>