《满庭芳•夏之曲》
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font-size: 20px;"></strong><span style="color: rgb(33, 33, 33); font-size: 22px; font-family: SimSun;"><strong>《满庭芳•夏之曲》</strong></span><br data-filtered="filtered" style="color: rgb(33, 33, 33); font-family: -apple-system, BlinkMacSystemFont, "Helvetica Neue", "PingFang SC", "Microsoft YaHei", "Source Han Sans SC", "Noto Sans CJK SC", "WenQuanYi Micro Hei", sans-serif; font-size: 20px;"><br data-filtered="filtered" style="color: rgb(33, 33, 33); font-family: -apple-system, BlinkMacSystemFont, "Helvetica Neue", "PingFang SC", "Microsoft YaHei", "Source Han Sans SC", "Noto Sans CJK SC", "WenQuanYi Micro Hei", sans-serif; font-size: 20px;"><span style="color: rgb(33, 33, 33); font-size: 22px; font-family: SimSun;">文|三笑</span><br data-filtered="filtered" style="color: rgb(33, 33, 33); font-family: -apple-system, BlinkMacSystemFont, "Helvetica Neue", "PingFang SC", "Microsoft YaHei", "Source Han Sans SC", "Noto Sans CJK SC", "WenQuanYi Micro Hei", sans-serif; font-size: 20px;"><br data-filtered="filtered" style="color: rgb(33, 33, 33); font-family: -apple-system, BlinkMacSystemFont, "Helvetica Neue", "PingFang SC", "Microsoft YaHei", "Source Han Sans SC", "Noto Sans CJK SC", "WenQuanYi Micro Hei", sans-serif; font-size: 20px;"><span style="color: rgb(33, 33, 33); font-size: 22px; font-family: SimSun;"> 丝柳翻飞，油云漫卷，沛然雨泻空庭。蔷薇溜翠，丛竹更泠泠。多少乱红溅起，顷刻便、池满浮萍。绮窗外，檐铃叮脆，恁把夏虫惊。 凝烟疏渐尽，霁天山阔，新草风清。又闻得，门西景和喧声。幕降何人共我，寻常对、蛙鼓闲情。听香处，蟾光别样，恰似你眸明。</span><br data-filtered="filtered" style="color: rgb(33, 33, 33); font-family: -apple-system, BlinkMacSystemFont, "Helvetica Neue", "PingFang SC", "Microsoft YaHei", "Source Han Sans SC", "Noto Sans CJK SC", "WenQuanYi Micro Hei", sans-serif; font-size: 20px;"><br data-filtered="filtered" style="color: rgb(33, 33, 33); font-family: -apple-system, BlinkMacSystemFont, "Helvetica Neue", "PingFang SC", "Microsoft YaHei", "Source Han Sans SC", "Noto Sans CJK SC", "WenQuanYi Micro Hei", sans-serif; font-size: 20px;"><span style="color: rgb(33, 33, 33); font-size: 22px; font-family: SimSun;">注：1.油云：典出《孟子．梁惠王上》:"天油然作云，沛然下雨。"后诗文中因以"油云"指浓云。 2.景和：景和公园。</span><p></p> <iframe frameborder="no" width="330" height="86" src="//music.163.com/outchain/player?type=2&id=304951&auto=1&height=66"></iframe><div><br></div><div><font size="4" face="宋体"><b>附诗友精彩点评留念：</b></font></div><div><font face="宋体" size="4"><br></font></div><div><font face="宋体" size="4">雕刻西风：</font></div><div><span style="background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242); color: rgb(51, 51, 51);"><font face="宋体" size="4">雨虽沛然，心却如空庭。意象铺陈时，宁静中又似乎带着一点清冷，“泠泠”“惊”等略透个中消息。到下阕，“幕降何人共我”先埋下伏笔；结拍处，“恰似你眸明”回应上一拍、此刻元是无人共对，并印证了读者在上阕留存的印象。通篇布局很见精巧。同时，结拍很轻灵地挽住蟾光，荡起忆人的情思，饶有余味！</font></span></div><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="宋体" size="4">当然，还有另外一种可能，那就是“你眸明”就在主人公的身边，一起听香看月，也是能解释得通的。</font></span><div><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="宋体" size="4"><br></font></span></div><div><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="宋体" size="4">襄水：</font></span></div><div><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="宋体" size="4">意象鲜活，过片自然，气韵贯通，好一首夏之曲！歇拍最为精彩，听香处，香，怎么听，显然此处将嗅觉诉之于听觉，运用通感手法，妙招。把雨后明月比作人的眼睛，也很巧妙，余味弥足。</font></span></div><div><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="宋体" size="4"><br></font></span></div><div><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="宋体" size="4">萍踪风影：</font></span></div><div><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="宋体" size="4">一曲夏夜，风掀纱帘，送来一丝清凉；雨泻空庭，溅起朵朵水花。一席诗话消酷暑，满池青萍逐残红。精致的刻画，好美的意象。凝烟疏渐尽，霁天山野阔，情思袅袅，逐梦天涯，一路走来，那双明澈如水的眼睛，犹如皎洁的明月，伴我前行！拜读佳构，如临其境，是美的享受，是心灵的慰藉！</font></span></div><div><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="宋体" size="4"><br></font></span></div><div><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="宋体" size="4">小词：</font></span></div><div><font face="宋体" size="4"><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);">古韵新声，别致有味！</span><br style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);">听香处，蟾光别样，恰似你眸明。笑姐这结句，真是闪了我的眼。</span></font></div><div><font face="宋体" size="4"><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><br></span></font></div><div><font size="4" face="宋体">常青树：</font></div><div><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font size="4" face="宋体">一曲满庭芳，包罗清夏万籁之音，草木欣荣，暗香疏影的夏景，带给人一丝丝清凉。学习佳作好词。</font></span></div> 欣赏佳作，为三笑老师点赞。 三笑老师好~
三笑老师好文才，欣赏 问好笑宝，欣赏你的精彩诗文 图文并茂呀，怎么就写得这么这么精彩呀，这夏在你的笔端落墨留香，点赞！ 一缕浅秋清风，一滴秋露，拂去酷热的夏；一抹墨香，一曲悠扬，渲染一幅唯美画卷。感谢精彩分享，中画有你相伴更精彩，遥祝秋安！ 幽园馨兰 发表于 2018-8-8 19:47
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