七律簡評
<span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: Simsun; background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);">自在普陀清净地，佛光慈照泽无边。</span><br style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: Simsun; background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: Simsun; background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);">浩然梵世三千界，卓尔悲心一朵莲。</span><br style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: Simsun; background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: Simsun; background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);">你看他时他看你，缘随我处我随缘。</span><br style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: Simsun; background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: Simsun; background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);">今生广证菩提果，不昧方知天外天。</span><br style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: Simsun; background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><br style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: Simsun; background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: Simsun; background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);">本人觀此律，心中一震！</span><br style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: Simsun; background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: Simsun; background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);">佛教題材的詩作，過去大多弄的玄之又玄，似吾輩，幾乎雲裏霧里。</span><br style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: Simsun; background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: Simsun; background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);">此作明白曉暢，尤其頸聯，對仗中夾帶頂針，體現一個萬千塵念，淨化繞指柔，繞的精彩！</span><br style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: Simsun; background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: Simsun; background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);">尾聯對句，第一個天，本應仄，屬於無傷大雅，可平可仄。</span><br style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: Simsun; background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><span style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: Simsun; background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);">可能是專屬題材，普陀、佛光、梵世、菩提等同類詞匯過於集中，但是亦無傷大雅也。</span><p></p>
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