秦磚七律解析
<font color="#333333" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font style="background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="Simsun">称兄道弟十余年，醉酒追风共簟眠。</font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font color="#333333" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font style="background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="Simsun">聚散无常均习惯，音书渐少已当然。</font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font color="#333333" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font style="background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="Simsun">人生契阔难同境，世事沉浮总忘筌。</font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font color="#333333" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font style="background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="Simsun">寂寞孤灯翻号码，几多旧友若飞鸢。</font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font color="#333333" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font style="background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="Simsun">秦磚，吾友也，勤勉作詩之典範，處處令我佩服。</font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font color="#333333" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font style="background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="Simsun">此作國慶長假思旧友，忆当年 而作，情感真實，感覺透露心聲。</font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font color="#333333" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font style="background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="Simsun">直接拍磚：</font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font color="#333333" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font style="background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="Simsun">1，首聯起句，俗語入詩，此法不能常用，鬚以功力壓制。對句，共簟眠，不妥。</font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font color="#333333" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font style="background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="Simsun">2，頜聯，還是剛才說的，俗語入詩，此處需要變，否則，打油詩也。</font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font color="#333333" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font style="background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="Simsun">3，頸聯，我們知道，頸聯轉折也，此處詩意與前面大同小異，應為重復，不如改成絶句。再者，頜聯、頸聯句式變化不大，也是不好。</font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font color="#333333" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font style="background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="Simsun">4，尾聯，幾乎等同於頜聯，也不妥。</font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font color="#333333" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font style="background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="Simsun">試以我近期類似一作證明以上觀點：</font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font color="#333333" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font style="background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="Simsun">七律*也寫個青春</font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font color="#333333" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font style="background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="Simsun">（八卦掌付）</font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font color="#333333" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font style="background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="Simsun">我被青春撞了腰，一瓢之上夢雲霄。</font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font color="#333333" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font style="background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="Simsun">昨兒種種皆拋去，明個紛紛可約邀。</font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font color="#333333" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font style="background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="Simsun">舊跡迷蹤餘蠹蝕，新篁亂敗倚扇搖。</font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font color="#333333" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font style="background-color: rgb(242, 242, 242);"><font face="Simsun">春花秋月何樣樣，誰識彎弓射大雕？</font></font></font><p></p>
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