一字之差，境界大變
<table cellspacing="0" cellpadding="0" style="table-layout: fixed; width: 757px; font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 12px; line-height: 18px;"><tbody><tr><td class="t_f" id="postmessage_418494" style="font-size: 14px;">原作：<br><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font size="4">平生才浅愧鸣琴，只爱西山故地吟。</font></font><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font size="4">一树梅开香韵古，千竿竹立道行深。</font></font><br><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font size="4">老僧归寺闻寒磬，暗鸟啼空入旧林。</font></font><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font size="4">夜半清风吹瘦骨，莲花峰下听心音。</font></font><br><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font size="4"><br></font></font><br><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font size="4">我的點評：</font></font><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font style="font-size: 16px;">激賞，流暢。</font></font><br><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font style="font-size: 16px;">唯一，暗鸟，難解也。欣賞學習，中午好。倦鳥，何如？</font></font><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font style="font-size: 16px;">理由：1，老僧對暗鳥，不妥。</font></font><br><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font style="font-size: 16px;"> 2，全詩靈秀、有禪意、清幽，暗，顯得不協調。</font></font><br><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font style="font-size: 16px;"><br></font></font><br><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font style="font-size: 16px;">改為：</font></font><br><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font style="font-size: 16px;"><br></font></font><br><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font size="4">平生才浅愧鸣琴，只爱西山故地吟。</font></font><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font size="4">一树梅开香韵古，千竿竹立道行深。</font></font><br><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font size="4">老僧归寺闻寒磬，倦鸟啼空入旧林。</font></font><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font size="4">夜半清风吹瘦骨，莲花峰下听心音。</font></font><br><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font size="4"><br></font></font><br><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font size="4">改後點評：整體通透，渾然天成，雅致！</font></font><br></td></tr></tbody></table><form method="post" autocomplete="off" id="vfastpostform" action="http://bbs.sijige.net/forum.php?mod=post&action=reply&fid=259&tid=64011&fromvf=1&extra=page=1&replysubmit=yes&infloat=yes&handlekey=vfastpost" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 12px; line-height: 18px;"><div id="vfastpost" class="fullvfastpost" style="margin-top: 30px; padding: 3px; background: rgb(229, 237, 242);"></div></form><p></p> 静静享受空灵神秘。。。 独行剑客 发表于 2015-10-24 20:40静静享受空灵神秘。。。
早上好。。
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