八卦掌付 发表于 2015-8-2 09:54

一七令*梅（修改稿）

本帖最后由 八卦掌付 于 2015-8-2 10:02 编辑 <br /><br /><span style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;">&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 一七令*梅</span><br style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;"><br style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;"><span style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;">&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;（八卦掌付）</span><br style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;"><br style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;"><span style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;">&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;梅，</span><br style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;"><span style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;">&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;我爱，风吹。</span><br style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;"><span style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;">&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;冰心意，傲容仪。</span><br style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;"><span style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;">&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;清寒三友，炽热千姿。</span><br style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;"><span style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;">&nbsp; &nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;琼楼悲玉宇，碧血注银眉。</span><br style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;"><span style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;">&nbsp; &nbsp;佳丽泪珠雪地，知音欢笑嗔谁？</span><br style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;"><span style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;">一缕幽怀凭栏寄，万种娇艳染青丝！</span><br style="font-family: Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif; font-size: 16px; line-height: 24px;"><p></p>

三笑 发表于 2015-8-3 11:08

漂亮的一七令，描写出了梅之清雅，之高洁~~感觉第6对仗可再斟酌~~问好八卦斑斑！

八卦掌付 发表于 2015-8-3 11:21

三笑 发表于 2015-8-3 11:08
漂亮的一七令，描写出了梅之清雅，之高洁~~感觉第6对仗可再斟酌~~问好八卦斑斑！

好的，我再看看。感谢了。
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