“银鳞翻浪”质疑
本帖最后由 八卦掌付 于 2015-4-16 14:20 编辑 <br /><br /><div align="center" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><div align="left"><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font face="宋体"><font size="3">这是网友的习作，一首“</font></font></font>银鳞翻浪”<span style="font-size: medium; font-family: 宋体;">七律——</span></div><div align="left"><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font face="宋体"><font size="3"><br></font></font></font></div><div align="left"><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font face="宋体"><font size="3">轻烟渲染数重山，露洗初阳溪水潺。</font></font></font></div></font></font></div><div align="center" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><div align="left"><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font face="宋体"><font size="3">柳意花情同脉脉，禽声人语两关关。</font></font></font></div></font></font></div><div align="center" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><div align="left"><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font face="宋体"><font size="3">今朝放浪形骸外，何日醉眠芳草间？</font></font></font></div></font></font></div><div align="center" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><div align="left"><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font face="宋体"><font size="3">梦有双双玉蝴蝶，翩翩飞去又飞还。</font></font></font></div></font></font></div><div align="center" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><div align="left"><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font face="宋体"><font size="3"><br></font></font></font></div></font></font></div><div align="center" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><div align="left"><font face="Tahoma, Helvetica, SimSun, sans-serif"><font face="宋体"><font size="3">此律，应该是：</font></font></font></div></font></font></div><div align="center" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><div align="left"><font color="#aaaaaa"><font face="simSun">平</font></font><font color="#000"><font face="simSun">平</font></font><font color="#aaaaaa"><font face="simSun">仄</font></font><font color="#000"><font face="simSun">仄仄平平（韵）</font></font></div></font></font></div><font color="#aaaaaa" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">仄</font></font></font></font><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">仄平平仄仄平（韵）</font></font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font color="#aaaaaa" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">仄</font></font></font></font><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">仄</font></font></font></font><font color="#aaaaaa" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">平</font></font></font></font><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">平平仄仄</font></font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font color="#aaaaaa" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">平</font></font></font></font><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">平</font></font></font></font><font color="#aaaaaa" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">仄</font></font></font></font><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">仄仄平平（韵）</font></font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font color="#aaaaaa" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">平</font></font></font></font><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">平</font></font></font></font><font color="#aaaaaa" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">仄</font></font></font></font><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">仄平平仄</font></font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font color="#aaaaaa" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">仄</font></font></font></font><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">仄平平仄仄平（韵）</font></font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font color="#aaaaaa" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">仄</font></font></font></font><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">仄</font></font></font></font><font color="#aaaaaa" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">平</font></font></font></font><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">平平仄仄</font></font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font color="#aaaaaa" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">平</font></font></font></font><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">平</font></font></font></font><font color="#aaaaaa" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">仄</font></font></font></font><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">仄仄平平（韵）</font></font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">对照平水韵谱：</font></font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">轻烟</font></font></font></font><font color="gray" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">渲</font></font></font></font><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">染数重山【山：十五删】 押韵</font></font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">露洗初阳</font></font></font></font><font color="red" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">溪</font></font></font></font><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">水潺【潺：十五删】 押韵</font></font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">柳意花情同脉脉</font></font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">禽声人语两关关【关：十五删】 押韵</font></font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">今朝放浪形骸外</font></font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">何日</font></font></font></font><font color="blue" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">醉</font></font></font></font><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">眠</font></font></font></font><font color="red" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">芳</font></font></font></font><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">草间【间：十五删(平)，十六谏(仄)】 押韵</font></font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">梦有双双</font></font></font></font><font color="blue" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">玉</font></font></font></font><font color="red" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">蝴</font></font></font></font><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">蝶</font></font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">翩翩飞去又飞还【还：十五删】 押韵</font></font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">(蓝字应平，红字应仄)</font></font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="Simsun">作者自解：</font></font></font></font><font color="#ff8c00"><span style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;">第二句，露洗初阳溪水潺。溪，该处可平可仄。</span><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><span style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;">第六句，何日醉眠芳草间（仄仄仄平平仄平）。这是救孤平格。</span><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><span style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;">第七句，梦有双双玉蝴蝶（仄仄平平仄平仄）。这是特定平仄格式，有“银鳞翻浪”美称！</span></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">果真如此吗？</font></font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font color="#000" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font style="font-size: 14px;"><font style="font-size: 15px;"><font face="simSun">附俺的专业介绍——</font></font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font size="4" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font color="#000"><font face="宋体">律句之美在圆转、在和谐、在铿锵。拗句之美在参差、在拗怒、在奇峭。妙在调济。前人说：“律诗之作，用字平仄，世有定体，众共守之，然时用变体，如兵之奇出，变化无穷，以惊世骇目”。</font></font></font><br style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun; font-size: 15px; line-height: 22.5px;"><font size="4" style="font-family: Tahoma, 'Microsoft Yahei', Simsun;"><font color="#000"><font face="宋体">中唐以后，李商隐、赴嘏辈，创为一种以第三字第五字平仄互易，如‘溪云<font color="red">初</font>起<font color="blue">日</font>沉阁，山雨<font color="red">欲</font>来<font color="blue">风</font>满楼’、‘残星<font color="red">几</font>点<font color="blue">雁</font>横塞，长笛<font color="red">一</font>声<font color="blue">人</font>倚楼’等，别有击撞波折之致。它们是对格式的灵活措置，是对和谐圆美的调剂，是思变求新，是美声之道。</font></font></font><p></p> 关于拗救也看过一些学习资料，各有不同说法，根据俺掌握的少量知识，感觉第二句溪字拗了，应该由本句的第三字来救，初字位置应该换个仄音字来救。第六句3、5平仄对调感觉应该没问题，在我看过的资料中也算是救了。第七句变成仄仄平平仄平仄，在我看过的资料中也有这种形式，应该算是救了。 三笑 发表于 2015-4-16 22:15关于拗救也看过一些学习资料，各有不同说法，根据俺掌握的少量知识，感觉第二句溪字拗了，应该由本句的第三 ...
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