网上清风 发表于 2014-9-19 09:02

[五律] 深秋夜绪

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三笑 发表于 2014-9-19 10:34

深秋夜绪意境营造的凄美、对仗工稳，层层渲染，尾联把愁绪推向高潮，好律赏学~~问好清风友！

我在这 发表于 2015-1-10 00:11

拜读 感觉很好.
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